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What Makes a Story Scary? Reduex.

scarry stroy

I wrote this two years ago for Halloween. I cleaned it up a bit and added photos and am re-posting. Hopefully I can get some more seasonal scary stuff out this weekend.

What makes a story scary? It is not easy to write a really scary story. It is easier to make a story scary in movies than trying to do it in print. In videos something can literally jump out at you. A novelist has to be more subtle. Here are some, but by no means all, the ways a writer can make a story scary, in any medium.

The Empathy Factor: The most common technique a writer uses to make a story scary is to create an interesting character that the reader associates with and put them in a dangerous situation. If the reader has emotionally invested in the character, they won’t want to see anything happen to them. It is even more so if the reader identifies with the character so much, that he thinks that, if they were any character in the story he would be the potential victim.. The character becomes a proxy for the reader, and the fear the read feels for the character is in some ways fear for himself.

Final girl

We all want to be the final girl.

There is a correlated trope ‘The child in danger.’ Personally this one bothers me, or it can bother me. Sure if pays off if it is done correctly. The finial battle between Ripley and the Queen in Aliens is an example of it done right, but I absolutely hate writers putting children in danger just for its own sake and if there is no story written around it.
Keeping it real: If something is possible, it is scarier, than something that we just can’t accept as ever happening. Norman Bates is scary because he is loosely based on several real people. It doesn’t have to be probable just possible. Jaws is scary because we all know that  people can be killed by sharks. So when it the shark goes from eating drunken swimmers to crashing holes into boats, and picking of the ship’s crewmen, it may not be likely, but we have had enough groundwork laid that we are willing to accept it. But when the shark eats a helicopter in Jaws II, it goes form scary to silly.
This includes things that we know are not real, but might be sometime in the future. One of the things that makes the original Alien movie so scary (Besides the premises that a monster is impregnating men with violent baby monsters), is that the ship and crew look realistic. The crew wears work-shirts, tee-shirts, jeans and caps with company logs on it. Not metallic smocks and day-glow leotards like in Buck Rodgers. The Nostromo doesn’t have warp coils and oscillating over-thrusters. It looks like what we think a spaceship full of ‘space-truckers’ might look like. Now there are some fantastic sci-fi stories that can be scary. A few episodes of Star Trek and Dr. Who stand out, but they overcome the fantastic setting by putting characters we have deep invested emotionally in, in danger.

nopstromo crew

It would have been less scary if they had all worn red shirts.

Cosmic Horror: If not invented by H.P. Lovecraft, he and his infamous writing circle definitely popularized the concept. The central idea behind cosmic horror is that the universe doesn’t give a darn about you. That the near godlike beings out there Cuthulhu/Crom/Ithaquha are so beyond us that we hardly register on their peripheral vision. If we get in their way they will stamp on us like ants, but other than that they don’t care about us.
This concept is true, at least to some degree. If I were to die, sure my friends and family would be sad. But it would have no effect on the cosmos as a whole. The sun would still burn, the moon would still shine, and the tides will still rise and fall. The universe honestly doesn’t care one iota about me.

cosmic horror

The universe wants you dead. trust me on this.

There is also the implication that there is no benign deity that will help and save us. No personal god means faith is a wasted effort. For my money the greatest cosmic horror story is Katherine Anne Porter’s The Jilting of Granny Weatherall. For those of you who may have missed it in eleventh grade English, it is the story of an old women who is dying and she remembers when she was young and was stood up at the alter. Then when she does die, there is nothing not eternal reward, no loving God’s embrace just darkness. I read that when I was sixteen and at that time that was the scariest thing I ever read.
Fear of the Unknown: One of Lovecraft’s most famous quotes is “The oldest and strongest emotion of mankind is fear, and the oldest and strongest kind of fear is fear of the unknown” Heck I even have that on a tee-shirt, but it is true. If you are walking down a dark alley all you hear mysterious and ominous footsteps behind you it is scary. But if you know it is just Joe going to get something he left in his car, then it not scary at all.


Not as scary this way.

Movies were once forced into this ‘less is more’ mentality, by the nature of their props, mechanical sharks that sank when filming, and alien costumes that looked silly if the camera lingered on them for too long. Now with CGI, and improved special effects movies can jump right in to the menace, this I think makes movies less scary not more scarier.
Fear of the Unnatural: Every culture I have ever studied has a dreadful fear of the animated corporeal dead, that returns to wreck devastation on the living. Spiritual undead may be benign or more than likely, appeased, but the dead that return in the flesh always come back for blood and vengeance. Why is this? My guess is because after thousands of years at looking at dead people, we as a race got that if they ever did wake up after they were truly dead it would be pretty unnatural and that had to be bad.

z girls

The walking dead shouldn’t look hot.

Before all the zombie hype I had a friend tell me that, zombies really creeped her out. I asked her if she was bothered by vampires, and she said no. Vampires could at least hide their unnaturalness, where zombies couldn’t. A vampire’s normalness may be an illusion but they only become really scary when they are menacing a favorite character or they drop the mask humanity.
Fear of Technology: We live in a high tech society, but deep down we don’t trust all this techno crap we have surrounded ourselves with. This isn’t a new concept either. I listened to a collection of old sci-fi nineteen fifties programs going to work. Of the twenty stories three were about nuclear war, two were about robots that started killing humans, one was a scientist making giant insects that trapped his wife and a delivery boy in their house, and one was about the human race so mutated in the future by radiation and pollution that they no longer looked like humans. A full thirty-five percent of the stories were about technology turned against us.

A scene from the 2003 film Terminator 3: Rise of the Machines

Oh by the way the future wants to kill you too.

My fear of technology is so great; I won’t even read Stephen King’s Cell. Not since I bought a mobile phone anyways. The original Night of the Living Dead’s zombie apocalypse was brought on by a falling radioactive satellite. We are as a race and a generation a short sighted collective of beings. To me at least, it seems to get worse and worse. I really do wonder sometimes if our ability to make things as outpaced or wisdom to use it them safely.


6 comments on “What Makes a Story Scary? Reduex.

  1. leggypeggy
    October 24, 2015

    I usually protect myself from scary movies. Not sure why. Often what happens in real life is much scarier.

    • davekheath
      October 24, 2015

      True the news is one of the scariest things out there.

  2. tessa tells all
    October 25, 2015

    This is great! I’ve read it a couple of times. What you wrote about empathy and relating to the character is so true. And I loved the point about the fear of the unknown. And I completely agree about the “child in danger” theme. I tend to not watch movies that have violence, or suggestion of violence with children. Even though it’s fiction, I have a hard time watching. But I agree the Aliens’ scene with Ripley is superbly done.

    • davekheath
      October 25, 2015

      Thank you any other suggestions about what makes something scary is always appreciated.

      • tessa tells all
        October 25, 2015

        I think you nailed it already! My only other thought revolves around a quote I read, “monsters don’t sleep under your bed, the sleep inside your head.” This is so poignant, as it reveals that our own fear creates monsters…and it also implies a that a certain darkness lurks in everyone, capable of being monstrous. So I would say, exploring the psychology of a person’s darkness can be very scary. Much like what you referenced about Norman Bates. It could really happen. And it does happen. And that’s what’s terrifying.

        All my best,

  3. Grandtrines
    January 15, 2016

    Reblogged this on Still Another Writer's Blog.

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